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Some people think books are lossing their importance in information and entertainment purposes.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is argued that some groups of people say that
books
 have been losing their main purposes.
This
 essay totally disagrees with the statement because I considered there are different genders of
books
 and people can select what story to read
according to
 their interests. Nowadays, there are a lot of genders of
books
 and each person can access them by going to the library or buying on their own. Each book has a different purpose and it is dependent on the personality and interest. genders have been growing and it is easy to find comedy, romance, terror, drama, fantasy, documental, research, spiritual, and educational intentions as part of the study life.
For example
 in developed countries, libraries have access to many platforms, which invite the community to read and get general culture through book connections, and I consider it a big opportunity to grow in specific skills
according to
 the goals of each person. It is true, that
books
 have been digitalized given that society is facing new changes and a new generation has become skilled in tech which is making life easier, but,
this
 does not mean that book are losing their main purpose of entertaining the public with stories that connect with groups,
otherwise
, the easy surf in the internet, make the possibility that different communities interact with new literature and open the view to other discussion topics, making critics to the new art, discovers, and popular stories that have been famous in
this
 century.
For instance
, the use of the Kingdom table as a digital tool to get
books
 has permitted the spread the literature in the whole world. In conclusion, I consider that
books
 have not lost the main idea of entertainment, the market has been spread with new interest topics,
according to
 the interaction of new cultures, transforming
books
 for digital devices that allow people access to different kinds of gender easily.
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