The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides data on how many men and women participated in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012,
while
the line graph displays the amount of participants in both genders. Overall
, men participants were always higher than women throughout the period, whereas
the number of players
rose gradually.
In the year 1924, male players
participated by around 3000 people, while
females have
only participated by approximately 100 people. The number of Unnecessary verb
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players
slightly increased until the end of the period in 2012, with 6000 and 4800, respectively.
The year 1924 was the lowest amount of players
in the Olympics for both sexes at more than 3000 athletes. This
data had risen steadily until 2012 to about 11000 participants and became the Olympics with the highest number of athletes.Submitted by talithanakhwah19 on
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