People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our lives generally more comfortable but many traditional values and customs have been lost and this is a pity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In modern society, in order to improve the quality of their lives,

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buy a range of items that allow them to live more comfortably. Some

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claim that

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, we have moved too far away from established beliefs and conduct

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and that

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is regrettable.

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, I believe that we should take full advantage of the money we earn to enrich our lifestyles

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and that we should progress rather than

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stuck in outdated traditions, so there is no cause for regret. It is claimed that consumerism has done harm to our society because the morals upheld by previous generations have been steadily eroded as we have become too focused on our own comfort.

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who hold

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opinion contend that values

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as respect for the institution of the family have declined in importance

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and that

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is a shame.

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, it is important to remember that many of these so-called values disadvantaged substantial numbers of

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.

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, it used to be believed that women should stay at home, clean the house and bring up children. Now, thanks to

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devices bought using

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of hard-working men and women, families have more time together, and surely nobody misses the unfair old societal norms. It is

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claimed by some that traditional rituals

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as those related to family or social events have become overshadowed by

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's desire to acquire new possessions and that

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is regrettable.

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,

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customs continue to thrive in so-called consumerist societies. Wedding rituals,

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, have remained unchanged, and of

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now receive more gifts than they did in the

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– all bought by the proceeds of

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's work. Other customs are enhanced by consumer goods

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as video cameras and mobile

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as more

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can enjoy traditional events either remotely or after the event.

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, nothing is lost and there is no need for regret. In conclusion, traditions have not been swept away by the desire of

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to buy things that improve their lives. It is true that some less-desirable societal norms and habits have gone, but their passing is nothing to lament over.