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he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph gives information about the
illiteracy
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rates
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 in the world based on regional and gender during the previous year.
Overall
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, the
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 rate for females is the highest for each country, especially in South
Asia
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. And for male has the lowest point compared to all
countries
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. Looking at the details, the
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rates
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 of female
illiteracy
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 in their areas is just under 30% (developed
countries
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 approximately 3%, latin american 3% and east
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asia
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 20%).
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, the
countries
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 with the highest
rates
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for
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 the uneducated female are more than 40%. It was sub-Saharan around 48%, Arab states
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% and the South
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asia
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Asia
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% which is the highest amount.
On the other hand
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, the male group in developed
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 has
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% respectively
illiteracy
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rates
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 and it increased in other
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, Latin
American
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10
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% and East
Asia
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approximately
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 8%.
Furthermore
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, the three
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 have a slight proportion (sub
sasaran
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Saharan
 31%, arab states 29% and South
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asia
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 35%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates, asia, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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