he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The graph gives information about the
illiteracy
rates
in the world based on regional and gender during the previous year.
Overall
, the
illiteracy
rate for females is the highest for each country, especially in South
Asia
. And for male has the lowest point compared to all
countries
. Looking at the details, the
rates
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of female
illiteracy
in their areas is just under 30% (developed
countries
approximately 3%, latin american 3% and east
asia
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20%).
Then
, the
countries
with the highest
rates
for
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the uneducated female are more than 40%. It was sub-Saharan around 48%, Arab states
53
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% and the South
asia
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58
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% which is the highest amount.
On the other hand
, the male group in developed
countries
has
2
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% respectively
illiteracy
rates
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and it increased in other
countries
, Latin
American
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10
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% and East
Asia
approximately
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8%.
Furthermore
, the three
countries
have a slight proportion (sub
sasaran
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Saharan
31%, arab states 29% and South
asia
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35%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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