The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013

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There are two plans which

illustrates

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the renovation in the Natural History

museun

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Museum

from 2010 to 2013.

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, changes consisted of converting and enlarging the main

bulding

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building

as well as

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demolishing the garden.

Intering

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Entering

the museum, there

are

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some

remodeling

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left

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part

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. The mammals

part

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relocated and have been moved to

right

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half of

building

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the building

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which is of

newly

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extentions

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extensions

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south western

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part

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has

been remained

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the same since 2010, there are some new

fuctional

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functional

spaces added to

plan

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the south

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south east

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. These places are the catering

part

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and a shop where

poeple

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people

can buy gits and posters

relataed

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relating

to the natural history and

also

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enjoy having a coffee in

this

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thieilling

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thrilling

chilling

atmosphere.

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, there was a garden in 2010 that

replaced

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by the human origins display in

new-built

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section to

activat

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activate

this

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museum as

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delighted

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place for

variouse

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various

options. Different types of animals are

showed

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in the new building to charm more

audiances

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audiences

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

158 words

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Some people think that modern tecchnology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To wat extent do you agree or disagree.