The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013

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There are two plans which

illustrates

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the renovation in the Natural History

museun

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Museum

from 2010 to 2013.

Overall

, changes consisted of converting and enlarging the main

bulding

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building

as well as

demolishing the garden.

Intering

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Entering

the museum, there

are

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some

remodeling

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left

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part

. The mammals

part

relocated and have been moved to

right

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half of

building

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the building

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which is of

newly

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extentions

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extensions

Although

south western

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southwestern

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part

has

been remained

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the same since 2010, there are some new

fuctional

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functional

spaces added to

plan

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the south

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south east

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. These places are the catering

part

and a shop where

poeple

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people

can buy gits and posters

relataed

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relating

to the natural history and

also

enjoy having a coffee in

this

thieilling

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thrilling

chilling

atmosphere.

In addition

, there was a garden in 2010 that

replaced

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by the human origins display in

new-built

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section to

activat

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activate

this

museum as

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delighted

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place for

variouse

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various

options. Different types of animals are

showed

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shown

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in the new building to charm more

audiances

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audiences

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

158 words

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