More and more people today expect to get what they want instantly (goods, services, news), without having to wait. Why is this ? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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In a fast-paced and technological era, the demand for
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gratification has reached unprecedented levels. Goods, services and news can all be accessed instantly, satisfying the innate desire for immediate results. And it has been a subject of debate. From my perspective, I believe that it is a negative trend for several reasons. An increasing number of
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are getting used to attaining things as fast as possible for many reasons.
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, online platforms and apps offer the convenience of obtaining necessities with minimal effort and time.
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, some products that may have been impossible in certain periods of the year, are accessible now, even though have been delivered to the doorsteps of customers.
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approach to news allows
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to be aware of global events.
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can engender awareness and empathy among individuals.
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, I tend to see a negative shade. The emphasis on
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gratification can lead to a reduction in patience and perseverance. If
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get what they want immediately, they can hardly appreciate it.
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, easy access to goods can foster impulsive purchasing behaviour.
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can cause environmental degradation.
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, shallow engagements, where
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skim through headlines without delving deeper into complex issues, are
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immediate access to news and information.
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can result
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thinking
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understanding of important matters. In conclusion, easy access leads
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to
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contentment,
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I think that it is a negative trend as it can lead to degradation of the environment and impatience.
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