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Do you agree that the use of bioplastics is a crucial step towards reducing plastic pollution?

#bioplastics #step #plastic #pollution
Plastic
 is the third most common derivative of petroleum in the world, each year, 200 million tons of
plastic
 are consumed
in
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 the planet, and it is contaminating and non-biodegradable. As the problem continues to rise, we have figured out some
plastic
 alternatives,
such
 as
bioplastics
, some argue that they are a crucial step towards reducing
plastic
 pollution and I completely agree, as they reduce carbon footprint, they are 100% biodegradable and
dont
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don't
 change the
flavor
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 in the contained
food
.
Bioplastics
 are
a
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key when reducing
plastic
 pollution, to illustrate,
plastic
 is made of materials like cellulose, coal, natural gas, salt and crude oil,
in contrast
,
bioplastics
 are made up
from
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 natural
pollymers
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polymers
 or potato and corn starch waste,
as
a
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consequence, they reduce carbon footprint, they are 100% biodegradable and are equally resistant and versatile as
plastic
.
Furthermore
, when
food
 is stored
on
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 a
plastic
 container of low quality for a long time, the
plastic
 will drop microplastics,
that
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 change the flavour of our
food
 and free
BPA's
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BPA
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 that can cause breast and ovarian cancer, unlike,
bioplastics
,
that
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 are not harmful to the health and do not change the
food
's
flavor
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.
To conclude
plastic
 is just not sustainable anymore, as it is non-biodegradable and contaminates the planet,
nonetheless
, we have developed some alternatives like
bioplastics
, which are 100% biodegradable,
dont
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don't
 harm your health and reduce carbon footprint.
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