Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There is an arguable discussion about the main subject at primary school,
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history
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or
Science
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and
Technology
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.
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that
science
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and
technology
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should be the focus
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academy
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;
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,
this
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essay will still cover both sides. On the one hand,
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takes fundamental knowledge
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how events in the past have
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this
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country, Indonesia, from our founding
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, heroes, and even many kingdoms in the past.
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,
history
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helps pupils to have value and insight
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the meaning of struggle and fight for our independence.
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, from
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history
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student
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will know about how people
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in the past, with very limited resources. From that story, they can learn about
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of tools,
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, crafting tools from stone to metal, that can enhance children’s view on resilience in life.
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, some people might assume that
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on
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and
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subjects at primary school can give more benefits
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the student’s future.
Technology
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development today, is on the rise,
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,
study
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at
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this
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sector will lead to research and development on
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science’s
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jobs that will contribute to
make
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advance
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improvement
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improvements
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.
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, at
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science
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project, each student team can explore to do several experiments that can boost their analytical thinking.
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,
science
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knowledge can make
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the student
a student
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think critically and have good
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characteristic
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characteristics
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that
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are important
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for their future. In conclusion,
academic
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curriculum at school can make certain subjects
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a priority, for
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, children will learn about
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moments in the past that
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their value and
characteristic
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characteristics
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,
while
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for
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the
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science
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and
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will help them to follow massive
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update
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and innovation.
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, learning about
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is significant, but
science
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will
provide
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greatly enhance
in
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pupils
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skills.
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task achievement
Make sure to introduce both viewpoints and your personal opinion clearly in the introduction to immediately present a clear position.
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Develop your ideas thoroughly and evenly. Both the viewpoints of history and Science & Technology should be equally discussed to meet the task requirements.
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Aim to include more relevant examples and ensure they are detailed to illustrate your points effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Structure your essay into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose (introduction, two body paragraphs discussing each view, and a conclusion).
coherence and cohesion
Make use of cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs, but avoid overusing them.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid overly lengthy sentences to enhance clarity and cohesion. Use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures for better flow.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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