Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
There is an arguable discussion about the main subject at primary school,
such
as Linking Words
history
or Use synonyms
Science
and Use synonyms
Technology
. Use synonyms
This
essay Linking Words
argue
that Change the verb form
argues
science
and Use synonyms
technology
should be the focus Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
of
academy
; Add an article
the academy
however
, Linking Words
this
essay will still cover both sides.
On the one hand, Linking Words
history
takes fundamental knowledge Use synonyms
on
how events in the past have Change preposition
of
build
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built
this
country, Indonesia, from our founding Linking Words
father
, heroes, and even many kingdoms in the past. Fix the agreement mistake
fathers
Moreover
, Linking Words
history
helps pupils to have value and insight Use synonyms
on
the meaning of struggle and fight for our independence. Change preposition
into
Furthermore
, from Linking Words
Use synonyms
history
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history,
student
will know about how people Fix the agreement mistake
students
life
in the past, with very limited resources. From that story, they can learn about Replace the word
lived
development
of tools, Add an article
the development
For example
, crafting tools from stone to metal, that can enhance children’s view on resilience in life.
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On the other hand
, some people might assume that Linking Words
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focusing
science
and Use synonyms
technology
subjects at primary school can give more benefits Use synonyms
on
the student’s future. Change preposition
to
Technology
development today, is on the rise, Use synonyms
thus
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study
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studying
at
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in
this
sector will lead to research and development on Linking Words
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science’s
jobs that will contribute to Change noun form
science
make
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apply
advance
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advanced
improvement
. Fix the agreement mistake
improvements
For instance
, at Linking Words
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science
project, each student team can explore to do several experiments that can boost their analytical thinking. Correct article usage
a science
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science
knowledge can make Use synonyms
student
think critically and have good Add an article
the student
a student
problem solving
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problem-solving
characteristic
that Fix the agreement mistake
characteristics
important
for their future.
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are important
academic
curriculum at school can make certain subjects Add an article
the academic
as
a priority, for Change preposition
apply
history
, children will learn about Use synonyms
treasure
moments in the past that Replace the word
treasured
builds
their value and Correct subject-verb agreement
build
characteristic
, Fix the agreement mistake
characteristics
while
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for
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apply
the
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apply
science
and Use synonyms
technology
will help them to follow massive Use synonyms
technology
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update
and innovation. Fix the agreement mistake
updates
However
, learning about Linking Words
history
is significant, but Use synonyms
science
will Use synonyms
provide
greatly enhance Verb problem
apply
in
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apply
pupils
skills.Change noun form
pupils'
pupil's
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task achievement
Make sure to introduce both viewpoints and your personal opinion clearly in the introduction to immediately present a clear position.
task achievement
Develop your ideas thoroughly and evenly. Both the viewpoints of history and Science & Technology should be equally discussed to meet the task requirements.
task achievement
Aim to include more relevant examples and ensure they are detailed to illustrate your points effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Structure your essay into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose (introduction, two body paragraphs discussing each view, and a conclusion).
coherence and cohesion
Make use of cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs, but avoid overusing them.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid overly lengthy sentences to enhance clarity and cohesion. Use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures for better flow.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?