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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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Consuming
food
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 today is much easier than years before. It occurs because nowadays, we can find at the local market ingredients from different parts of the country,
what
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 creates the possibility of the preparation of many kinds of meals.
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 that, the internet gives us the easiness of finding diverse recipes, making the preparation possible.
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result
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 there is an improvement
concerning
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in
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 the way that we live and
we
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 relate ourselves
with
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food
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. The development of technology and science promoted the enhancement of
crops
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 production, which favoured the growing of diverse species of vegetables, fruits and
greenary
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greenery
 in different seasons. The genetic
enhacement
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enhancement
 of bean seeds,
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, developed by scientists in Brazil, made the beans crop stronger to stand cold weather conditions in the south of the country.
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, the local population can enjoy the harvest even out of season production, preparing their meals.
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 to it, there is the factor information. The access
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 the Internet
have
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has
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 enlarged our repertory
about
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of
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food
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. Through
this
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, we are able to
know
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 about different kinds of dishes, what we need to cook them and how to prepare them.
Though
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medias
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media
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,
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 as videos,
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, we can see the steps of the cooking process and how it
have
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has
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at the end
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.
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, as we can see, our daily
realationship
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relationship
 with
food
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 preparation
was
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has been
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 boosted over
the
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apply
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time thanks to the development of science, technology and information.
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, we can eat well and know more about diverse
cousines
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cuisines
cuisine
 and ingredients.

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Ensure that the introduction clearly addresses the question and presents a thesis statement.
coherence and cohesion
Organize ideas into clear paragraphs, each with a topic sentence and supporting details.
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Expand on your ideas with specific examples and results to support your arguments.
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Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Conclude your essay by summarizing the main points and restating the thesis in light of the evidence presented.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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