Some believe that charitable organisations should help people no matter where they live. Others argue that charities should only help those living in the country where the charity is based. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are many charitable
organisations
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in the world.Some of them have expanded their charity works beyond their home
country
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while
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some are only based in the
country
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where they built.
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According to some
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people
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,
they
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argue that all charitable
organisations
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should expand their work
in
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overseas
while
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others
tell
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that they should operate in their region. I agree with the phenomenon
of
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charitable
organisations
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should help
people
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without considering their place because everyone in the world should
be benefited
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specially
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victims. Those who believe that all types of help must go
for
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their own citizens think that charities are operated by their own taxes and
donations
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.In fact, many charities which operate in their home
country
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collect money from their own citizens as
donations
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or direct taxes.So
that
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,
people
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argue that natives should be prioritised when distributing
donations
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. Another reason is it would reduce the level of crimes.Some
people
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who are living in
a
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poor countries tend to commit more crimes
such
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as robberies
due to
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lack of money. To minimize robberies, charitable
organisations
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in poor countries can donate money
for
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their
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underprivileged sector in their home
country
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to uplift their living conditions.
On the other hand
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, all
people
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can be regarded as human beings and they are entitled to gain
donations
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and help in spite of where they live and help should not be targeted to
specific
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community.If
people
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who
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become victims of environmental hazards or military conditions, they
also
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have a right to recover from them. To
illustrates
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, overseas charitable
organisations
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play a significant role
although
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they operate in
another region
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.
For example
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, in
Tsunami
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disaster, more than 2000000 laks
people
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around the Indian
ocean
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bacame
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victims and
total
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of $10 billion
material
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losses
according to
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Britanica
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and Unesco records respectively.
In
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that occasion,
unicef
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played a key role as they
supported
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by immediate
donations
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along with
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helped
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the
tsunami affected
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communities in building back better.
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, I agree with the argument of helping
any
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people
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without considering their place . In conclusion,
Although
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some
people
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feel that charitable
organisations
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should operate in their own
country
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because they are funded by own public and
heal
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the crime rates, I strongly believe that charities
also
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expand their works into different destinations when it is required.

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Address the task directly and develop your points fully. Provide a balanced discussion of both views, and include relevant examples to support your arguments. Make sure your conclusion reflects the content of the essay and your opinion is clear.
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