The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts information about employees
women
and men in two countries A and B
. It is clear from the chart that most of country
B
tend to work in the services department.
Overall
, country
A shows more multiple in of jobs
especially in women
Change noun form
women's
occupations
. On the other hand
, most workers in country
B
crowded service occupations
.
The lowest number of jobs
in country
A for males are in industry which is 15 per cent
while
the same occupations
in the other country
is 32 per cent
. Although
Men
agriculture Change noun form
Men's
jobs
is
the lowest percentage in Verb problem
have
land
B
which is 3 percent, in
Change preposition
apply
land
A shows more demand. The service occupations
in land
B
is
the highest demand for Females with 88 per Verb problem
have
cent
. However
, there is a common gap of 39 per cent
lower for service jobs
in country
A. In addition
, agriculture jobs
for women
are the lowest percentage in both countries is 1 per cent
while
in country
A is 41 per cent
.
To sum up
, we could say that the lowest crowd is women
in agriculture country
B
also
the crowdest job is females services in the same land
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on
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