The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts information about employees
women
and men in two countries A and
B
. It is clear from the chart that most of
country
B
tend to work in the services department.
Overall
,
country
A shows more multiple in of
jobs
especially in
women
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women's
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occupations
.
On the other hand
, most workers in
country
B
crowded service
occupations
. The lowest number of
jobs
in
country
A for males are in industry which is 15 per
cent
while
the same
occupations
in the other
country
is 32 per
cent
.
Although
Men
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Men's
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agriculture
jobs
is
Verb problem
have
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the lowest percentage in
land
B
which is 3 percent,
in
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apply
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land
A shows more demand. The service
occupations
in
land
B
is
Verb problem
have
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the highest demand for Females with 88 per
cent
.
However
, there is a common gap of 39 per
cent
lower for service
jobs
in
country
A.
In addition
, agriculture
jobs
for
women
are the lowest percentage in both countries is 1 per
cent
while
in
country
A is 41 per
cent
.
To sum up
, we could say that the lowest crowd is
women
in agriculture
country
B
also
the crowdest job is females services in the same
land
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, b, country, jobs, occupations, cent, land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce
  • percentage
  • male-dominated
  • female-dominated
  • sector
  • industry
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • predominance
  • statistical
  • trend
  • comparison
  • economically active
  • gender gap
  • labor market
  • employment rate
  • significant
  • minority/majority
  • contrast
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