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Goverment should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#goverment #money #railways #roads
Transports is a necessary
things
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thing
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 for
individual's
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an individual's
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 mobility,
proper
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and proper
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transports
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transport
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whereas
train
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a train
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 or car need a route or track to utilize the usage of
vehicle
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a vehicle
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. Based on the statistic, compared to the usage,
road
 have a bigger chart than the
railway
 and I strongly agree that the government needs to spend more money for the
road
 development. There are several
adventages
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advantages
 to
spend
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spending on
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road
 development.
firstly
, most
of
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apply
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individuals are using
road
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and they
able
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are able
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 to travel and move to
a particular places
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a particular place
particular places
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.
Furthermore
, most of vehicles are invented for
road
 which opposite from the usage with
railway
.
Railway
 only used for a specific tranportation which is train. speaking of
railway
 I personally believe that to build a
railway
 spend vast of money, what I mean is
railway
 is to build a
railway
 track is more expensive. To summarize,
In
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I
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my
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apply
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definitely think that the government need to spend more on
road
 routes rather than railways. The implementation of
road
 routes
are
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is
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vast
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in vast
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 demand. According the actual stats
road
 vehicles are reusable than the
railway
.
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