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The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999 The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999 The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999
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The given bar chart reveals the data on five types of qualification obtained by two genders in Australia in 1999.
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 male
students
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 noticeably dominated the Skilled vocational programme, their female counterparts had more percent in acquiring Undergraduate diplomas. Both men and women showed similar interest in gaining Bachelor’s degrees.
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 the chart, male
students
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 hold an enormous proportion in Skilled vocational course, around 90% of the total number of
students
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, in comparison to 10% of female
students
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. In Undergraduate diploma programme men accounted for almost 40%,
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 60% of the total number belonged to
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 from the opposite gender. Bachelor’s degree course was favored almost equally by two genders. In pursuing Postgraduate and Master’s degree qualifications, men surpassed women in the given year. Distribution of proportion for the postgraduate diploma was 70% for males and 30% for females and Master's degree allocations were 60% and 40%, respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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