The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates the process of turning
sugar
cane into sugar
. Overall
, the process is broken down into seven steps that can be categorized into four main categories. Planting, harvesting, crushing, and processing.
To begin
with, the sugar
cane is grown for around 12-18 months. After that, the second step is to harvest the sugar
cane which can be done manually by the farmers or with the help of a machine.
After the sugar
canes are harvested, the farmers put it into a machine specialized to crush it in order to extract the liquid. After that, we start to process the liquid using the help of machines. In the fourth step, it is put through a limestone filter to purify the juice. From this
, the extracted juice is put into an evaporator over heat, to turn the liquid into syrup. It is then
put into a centrifuge to separate the sugar
crystals from the syrup. Lastly
, the sugar
is dried and cooled in the seventh step.Submitted by acupofbrownsugar
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