People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. to whta extent do you agree or disagree?
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thinks
people
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people's
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compared
past
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the past
time
.Likewise
, I also
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idea that due to
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robots
people
can easily complete their work
without wasting their time
and energy.
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technological era , people
can finish their number of
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apply
work
at
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apply
time
even at home and Add an article
the time
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work
, for example
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most Correct your spelling
nowadays
of
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apply
the
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apply
doing
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do
cloths
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clothes
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by machines Add a missing verb
is done
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is done
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, by
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this
work
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completed
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quickly
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use
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past
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the past
time
housewife takes Correct your spelling
the
full
day to complete all the household Add an article
a full
work
.
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housework
work
but also
business
and transport system
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systems
such
as people
can travel long
and short Add an article
a long
distance
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distances
airplane
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aeroplane
however
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time
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times
people
takes
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take
long
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a long
time
to cove
distance . Correct your spelling
cover
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are grown
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growing
worldwide
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a worldwide
people
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plans
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in
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in
people
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a few
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global
level .
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the global
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although
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are more depend
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dependent
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nevertheless,
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helps
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and expand
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apply
business
at world wide
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worldwide
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