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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides data concerning the
spendings
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spending
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 on
health
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the health
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 sector in
percent
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per cent
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 of Gross Domestic Product (GDP) during the years 2012, 2007 and 2002 in twelve countries located in Europe.
Overall
, it is possible to note that European
East
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nations
 provided less expenditures than
West
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Western
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nations
. Switzerland was the biggest provider of investments
on
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 the observed field,
whereas
 Estonia had less application
on
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in
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 it. Countries nestled in East Europe showed
least
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the least
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 expenditures in the study. Estonia,
for example
, applied four times less resources on the field in comparison with Switzerland which spent almost 11% of their GDP, followed by Lithuania and Poland, where presented 6% and 7% of expenditure, respectively. It is interesting to see that both
nations
 had 2012 as the year with more efforts
on
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 the sector.
On the other hand
,
nations
 like Belgium. Denmark, France, Netherlands and Norway provided around 9% of their GDP on healthcare, showing different
percentage
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percentages
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 of investment in the three observed years,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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