The number of older people is increasing. Some people think that this will cause problems in their countries; others believe this group is important to society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Nowadays, the number of old people in some countries
is increase
. Some people believe that there are both Change the verb form
is increasing
benefit
and Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
drawback
Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
from
Change preposition
to
these phenomenon
. Change the determiner
this phenomenon
these phenomena
This
essay will talk about different point
of view Fix the agreement mistake
points
about
the effect of Change preposition
on
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the eldery
eldery
in a country.
On the one hand, Correct your spelling
elderly
elderly
are undoubtedly Correct article usage
the elderly
having
more and more experience in terms of theory and practice. It is one of the most considerable Verb problem
gaining
statement
because they had learnt and applied the knowledge for many years. Fix the agreement mistake
statements
For example
, the traditional health practioner which
skill Correct your spelling
with
full
of experience easy to diagnose from the shymthomp and some Correct word choice
and full
characteristic
which already occur in the patient’s body. In a short Fix the agreement mistake
characteristics
time
we can know what Add a comma
time,
the
health issue we have. Correct article usage
apply
Then
, all the students from university
have Add an article
the university
a
opportunity to takeChange the article
an
a
direct practice from the old practitioner.
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apply
On the other hand
, old people will spent
more in terms of pension. In some Change the verb form
spend
countries
the elderly Add a comma
countries,
is
under the protection of Change the verb form
are
government
. The elderly get monthly funding from the country. How much money should Add an article
the government
government
spend in a year to provide the elderly care facilitiesAdd an article
the government
.
If we can allocate the money for education, it Change the punctuation
?
is
better for Wrong verb form
will be
young
generation in the future. Add an article
the young
For instance
, the school or the university will get a new equipment
that Remove the article
new equipment
a piece of new equipment
full
of innovations. Add a missing verb
is full
However
, it just
an assumption to allocate all Add a missing verb
is just
the
budget Change preposition
of the
for
the elderly.
In conclusion, Change preposition
to
take
care Wrong verb form
taking
the
elderly is important but take care and make sure the future generations Change preposition
of the
more
and more substantial.Add a missing verb
are more
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Introduction
Be sure to have a clear introduction that presents the topic and gives a hint about your position or the direction of the essay. In your introduction, try to restate the prompt in your own words to show understanding.
Structure & Organization
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs: an introduction, at least two body paragraphs to discuss each view separately, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by explanations, examples or evidence.
Linking Words
Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs more effectively, ensuring a smoother flow of thoughts. Examples include 'However,' 'Furthermore,' 'As a result,' and 'For instance'.
Task Completion
For Task Achievement, fully address all parts of the task and make certain that your opinion is clear throughout, particularly if the question asks for it. Provide clear arguments for both views and your own stance in separate paragraphs.
Supporting Examples
Use specific examples to support your points. Avoid general statements and make sure your arguments are detailed and precise. If possible, include real facts, figures, or studies to support your arguments.
Grammar & Accuracy
Work on the grammar and accuracy of language use. Ensure subject-verb agreement, proper tense use, and correct sentence structure throughout your essay.
Your opinion
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?