The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The chart illustrates drink habits in five
cities
in Australia that
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from
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survey.
Australia
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people have
a
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different way
to buy
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coffee
and
tea
in
last
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4 weeks. They can
bought
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buy
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fresh, instant or
went
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go
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to a cafe for
coffee
.
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to
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their different
cities
. These different
cities
consists
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Sydney
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, Melbourne ,Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. The summaries about
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buying and drinking habits of
coffee
and
tea
will given below. The proportion of those buying
coffee
and
tea
in Sydney ranged or varied between 40% and 60% in
last
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4 weeks. Brisbane and
Hobart
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people consider
about
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apply
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their living
cost
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costs
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, so they prefer to
bought
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buy
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instant
coffee
than go to a cafe
for
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to
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buy some
coffee
.
While
,
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apply
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35%
Brisbane
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of Brisbane
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and Adelaide like to consume fresh
drink
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drinks
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for accompanying study or work.
In addition
, Melbourne
is
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the highest percentage who have drinking habits to buy
coffee
and
tea
.
Moreover
, Adelaide
is
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the
less
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lowest
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percentage
people
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that
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who
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have
routine
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a routine
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to buy
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for buying
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coffee
and
tea
among
four
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the four
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different
cities
. Around 60%
Hobart
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of Hobart
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and Melbourne society like to experience
go
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going
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to a cafe for
coffee
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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