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Archaeology is partly the discovery of treasures of the past, partly the work of the scientific analyst, partly the exercise of the creative imagination. Do you agree or disagree?

#archaeology #discovery #treasures #work #analyst #exercise #imagination
The aim of my project is to examine what are the favourite school subjects among teenagers in Zetland. To achieve
this
 goal I have found a table considering some
revelant
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relevant
 opinion polls. In
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 I will describe my findings and express my opinion.
According to
 the table, Mathematics is the most popular school
subject
 (40%), followed by Literature (23%). History was chosen only by 21% of respondents. Meanwhile, Chemistry and Physics
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 the bottom of the table, making up (9%) and (7%) respectively. Predictably, Mathematics is
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more
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popular
subject
 than
Chemisrty
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Chemistry
. The former is almost five times higher than the least.
This
 difference may be explained by skills, which these two
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 require. It is
nessecary
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necessary
 to learn by heart a lot of reactions, which
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 common statements in chemistry, unlike mathematics, where it is only one need – to understand how things work and
then
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pattern
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 to solve similar things.
However
,
stuiyng
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studying
staying
 may lead to vision
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, weak back
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 and stress. To avoid
this
 problem you should
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warmup
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 your body every 20-40 minutes of studying. It is obligatory for our organism to switch from mind work to
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 to stay healthy and focused. In conclusion, I
bealive
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believe
 that studying is
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 part of everybody’s life. It is essential to
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 horizons and not to dig deep only in one
subject
, because huge knowledge in different areas makes you an interesting person to
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 a conversation with.
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Task Achievement
Your introduction should more directly address the question prompt and your thesis statement (agreeing or disagreeing) should be clearly stated.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop a clear logical paragraph structure, with each paragraph focusing on one main idea, and use cohesive devices appropriately.
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples to support your main points and elaborate on your reasoning to clarify your argument.
Task Achievement
Make sure to stay focused on the initial IELTS topic throughout your response, rather than deviating to general advice on studying.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your conclusion summarises the key points made in the essay and reflects back to the statement made in your introduction.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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