The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
These graphs depict the rate of possessing
of
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appliances run by electricity and the amount of
time
spent
for
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doing
household
works
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work
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in a particular country from 1920 to 2019. The percentage of owning different home appliances
show
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shows
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an increase mostly but the
time
spent
for
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works
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work
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related
with
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household
show
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shows
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a gradual decline during
this
time
. On the one hand, in 1920 mostly no people owned
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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but it witnessed a sharp incline and
become
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became
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100% in 1980. Later, it didn't decrease till 2019.
Besides
, 30% of households owned vacuum cleaners in 1920.It started increasing gradually and
become
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100% in 2000. The rate was
also
100% in 2019.
Additionally
, the percentage of washing machine users fluctuated slightly. It was at 40% in 1920 and stood at 70% in 1960.
Next,
It faced a slight decline in 1980 and became less than 65%. Again, it
startrd
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started
to show an upward trend and stood over 70% in 2019.
On the other hand
,
masses
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spent 50
hours
a week to complete
household
works
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work
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in 1920.
Furthermore
, the amount of
time
has been decreased continuously. People spent only 20
hours
a week in 1960 and the rate stood at 10
hours
per week in 2019 which is
very
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a very
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little
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small
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amount compared to the spent
hours
by people for
household
works
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work
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in 1920.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, household, works, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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