Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The purpose of
this
letter is to request Linking Words
further
care and monitoring for Mrs. Brampton who was a smoker from the age of 18.
She Linking Words
got
admitted Verb problem
was
in
our home on 10/01/2011 with complaints of excessive smoking Change preposition
to
about
10 cigarettes per Change preposition
of about
day
. She was overweight with Use synonyms
the
BMI of 29. She has bad chest Correct article usage
a
Xray
signs. She Correct your spelling
X-ray
treated
with IV Amoxycillin with Add a missing verb
was treated
supplememtary
O2 therapy. Her BP was 170/90 mmHg and Correct your spelling
supplementary
pulse
was 92. She seems to be Correct pronoun usage
her pulse
quiet
breathless. She has Correct your spelling
quite
productive
cough. Her sputum was collected and Add an article
a productive
send
Wrong verb form
sent
it
for culture. She was prescribed Correct pronoun usage
apply
with
Pravastatin 20mg/Change preposition
apply
day
and Celecoxib 100mg/Use synonyms
day
.
She has been widowed for 25 years. Before Use synonyms
that
she was with her husband and they ran the Sydney Add a comma
that,
road
newsagency until his death.
She was advised to start deep breathing exercises and Capitalize word
Road
non smoking
regimen like Nicotine patches and Add a hyphen
non-smoking
Zyban
150mg twice a Use synonyms
day
.
It would be greatly appreciated if you could ensure that she will adhere to Use synonyms
Add an article
the non
non smoking
regimen,Add a hyphen
non-smoking
cessation
of smoking with the help of Correct word choice
and cessation
nicotinepatches
and Correct your spelling
nicotine patches
Zyban
. Kindly advise her about Use synonyms
side
effects of Correct article usage
the side
Zyban
Use synonyms
such
as dry mouth and difficulty Linking Words
in
sleeping. If it occurs Change preposition
apply
advice
her to stop Replace the word
advise
Zyban
.
Please do not hesitate to contact me in case of any queries.
Yours Sincerely
Charge nurseUse synonyms
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