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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
The purpose of
this
 letter is to request
further
 care and monitoring for Mrs. Brampton who was a smoker from the age of 18. She
got
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 admitted
in
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 our home on 10/01/2011 with complaints of excessive smoking
about
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 10 cigarettes per
day
. She was overweight with
the
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 BMI of 29. She has bad chest
Xray
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 signs. She
treated
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 with IV Amoxycillin with
supplememtary
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supplementary
 O2 therapy. Her BP was 170/90 mmHg and
pulse
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 was 92. She seems to be
quiet
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 breathless. She has
productive
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 cough. Her sputum was collected and
send
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it
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for culture. She was prescribed
with
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Pravastatin 20mg/
day
 and Celecoxib 100mg/
day
. She has been widowed for 25 years. Before
that
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 she was with her husband and they ran the Sydney
road
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 newsagency until his death. She was advised to start deep breathing exercises and
non smoking
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 regimen like Nicotine patches and
Zyban
 150mg twice a
day
. It would be greatly appreciated if you could ensure that she will adhere to
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non smoking
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 regimen,
cessation
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and cessation
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 of smoking with the help of
nicotinepatches
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nicotine patches
 and
Zyban
. Kindly advise her about
side
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 effects of
Zyban
such
 as dry mouth and difficulty
in
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sleeping. If it occurs
advice
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 her to stop
Zyban
. Please do not hesitate to contact me in case of any queries. Yours Sincerely Charge nurse
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task achievement
Please ensure your essay directly addresses the question asked. Your submission seems to be a letter requesting medical care rather than an essay discussing university education topics.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs each presenting a specific point, and a conclusion summarizing your stance or findings.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas and points. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that clearly states the point you'll discuss in that paragraph.
task achievement
Back up your points with examples or evidence. When discussing views or presenting your opinion, include specific reasons or examples to support your position.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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