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Some colleges encourage students to create businesses while they are still in school. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays
,
On the other hand
,
students
 establishing businesses
while
 still in school helps
students
 gain more experience and knowledge they have learned at school to be able to apply in practice.
In addition
,
in addition
 to experiencing hands-on nurturing skills
such
 as
problem solving
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, leadership, and time management, enriching an education beyond textbooks.
However
, there will still be disadvantages if
students
 establish a business early and will face many risks.
Students
 who only focus on projects and neglect their studies will delay graduation and neglect their health at work, causing stress, skipping meals, staying up late and waking up early, causing their health to decline. In summary, there are advantages and disadvantages to
students
 establishing a business
while
 still in school, but I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages mentioned above.
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