The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses. Summaries and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to

different courses.

Summaries and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph
showing
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the rate of change in popularity of three different activities in a UK
sports
club over a 20-year period.
Overall
, as it is shown, swimming preferences sharply decreased from 1995 to 2010,
whereas
, team
sports
and gym activities experienced growth through the
years
analyzed. Something important to mention refers to gym activities whose participants increased the most over these
years
.
However
, in 2010, all
sports
almost remained static with a little decrease in team
sports
preferences. Regarding swimming, the percentage of people who used to practice
this
sport slightly decreased from 1995 to 2000,
nonetheless
,
this
fall turned sharply in the next 10
years
, from over 40% to roughly 15%, remaining stable up to 2015.
On the other hand
, the gymnastic tendency had a little increase from 5% in 1995 to almost 10% in 2000. After that, it rapidly increased and reached its peak in 2010 with 28% approximately, to remain static
the
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next five
years
.
Finally
, team
sports
remained with little fluctuations over the
years
between 30% and 40%, with a peak at 40% in 2010.
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