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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are banned in the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as bicycles, buses, and taxis on vehicle-free days. Do you think the benefits of vehicle-free days outweigh the disadvantages?

#cities #vehicle-free #cars #trucks #motorcycles #city #center #people #transportation #bicycles #buses #taxis
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 the plaintiff’s complaint. The judges adjourned the hearing until April 1, 2024, with the agenda of the answer reply from the plaintiff;
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task achievement
The content provided does not address the topic of vehicle-free days in cities and the benefits or disadvantages of such an initiative. Instead, it discusses a legal proceeding unrelated to the task prompt.
coherence cohesion
There is no logical structure pertaining to the topic of vehicle-free days. The essay should begin with an introduction, followed by body paragraphs discussing the benefits and disadvantages, and end with a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks an introduction and conclusion, which are necessary for presenting the topic and summarizing the main points discussed.
coherence cohesion
The essay provided does not contain supported main points on the topic of vehicle-free days. Make sure to include relevant points and examples that relate directly to the topic.
task achievement
The essay does not complete the response to the prompt about vehicle-free days. It needs to address the question directly and provide well-developed ideas and arguments on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vehicle-free days
  • private cars
  • trucks
  • motorcycles
  • public transportation
  • bicycles
  • buses
  • taxis
  • air pollution
  • emission
  • pollutants
  • carbon dioxide
  • particulate matter
  • sustainable transportation
  • traffic congestion
  • environmentally friendly
  • pedestrians
  • urban space
  • businesses
  • revenue
  • vehicular access
  • customers
  • shops
  • restaurants
  • displaced vehicles
  • restricted zone
  • inconvenience
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
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