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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.

The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.
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The pie charts illustrate the outcome of a survey relating to the rating of the
range
 of
books
 and non-printed
materials
 from undergraduate and postgraduate
students
 in their library.
Overall
, it could be seen that
students
 in that school voted for both documents to a very good level.
However
, it was true that the rating tendency of
postgraduates
 about the
range
 of
books
 and non-printed
materials
 was not good. Looking at the charts’
range
 of
books
, there were 37% of undergraduates considered the
range
 of
books
 not good,
while
this
 percentage of postgraduate
students
 just contributed 22%.
Moreover
, the ratio of
postgraduates
 feeling not satisfied with the
range
 of
books
 was half.
In addition
, the feeling of satisfaction in undergraduates and
postgraduates
 contributed 25% and 28%, respectively. Turning to the rest, a similar trend could be seen in the feedback about non-printed
materials
 from two types of
students
.
While
 62% of
postgraduates
 showed dissatisfaction with these
materials
, the portion of
students
 voting very good for non-printed
materials
 was 68%.
Nevertheless
, the ratios of satisfaction rating of both were quite low, around a quarter.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words range, books, materials, students, postgraduates with synonyms.
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