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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.

The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.
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The pie charts illustrate the outcome of a survey relating to the rating of the
range
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 of
books
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 and non-printed
materials
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 from undergraduate and postgraduate
students
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 in their library.
Overall
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, it could be seen that
students
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 in that school voted for both documents to a very good level.
However
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, it was true that the rating tendency of
postgraduates
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 about the
range
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 of
books
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 and non-printed
materials
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 was not good. Looking at the charts’
range
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 of
books
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, there were 37% of undergraduates considered the
range
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 of
books
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 not good,
while
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this
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 percentage of postgraduate
students
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 just contributed 22%.
Moreover
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, the ratio of
postgraduates
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 feeling not satisfied with the
range
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 of
books
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 was half.
In addition
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, the feeling of satisfaction in undergraduates and
postgraduates
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 contributed 25% and 28%, respectively. Turning to the rest, a similar trend could be seen in the feedback about non-printed
materials
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 from two types of
students
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.
While
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 62% of
postgraduates
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 showed dissatisfaction with these
materials
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, the portion of
students
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 voting very good for non-printed
materials
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 was 68%.
Nevertheless
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, the ratios of satisfaction rating of both were quite low, around a quarter.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words range, books, materials, students, postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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