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the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1920 to 20202, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1920 to 20202, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
#information #percentage #population #four #asian #countries #cities #predictions
The graph provides information about the percentage of the
population
 in Asian dwelling in cities between 1970 and 2020 and
also
 with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
There
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Four
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 are illustrated
four
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in four
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counties
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countries
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such
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apply
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as
Philippines
,
Malaysia
, Thailand,
Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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.
Overall
, the
amount
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number
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 of people who are living in the cities
are
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is
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 increasing throughout all years in
Malaysia
 and
Indonesia
as well as
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
have
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has
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 some fluctuations but with the
predication
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prediction
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 of
rise
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a rise
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 in the future.
Population
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The population
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 of
Indonesia
 and Thailand started from
the
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apply
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less than 20% and reached 30% in 2000.
However
,
then
Indonesia
 prevalently was growing and even in
near
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the near
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 future have predictions of achieving 60% of city dwellers. Comparatively, Thailand remained
in
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at
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 30% until 2020. It is guessed that there will be
rise
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the rise
a rise
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of
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in
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city
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the city
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population
more
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by more
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 than 40%
until
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by
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 2040. Meantime, in comparison
these
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to these
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 countries, most
population
 of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 (30 %) and
Malaysia
 (above 30%) lived in cities in 1970.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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 had some fluctuation between 1970 and 2010, and
after
this
 have started to go up. At the same time,
Malaysia
’s city
population
 is enduring only
prevalent
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a prevalent
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 rise and achieved more than 70 % in 2020 and
also
have
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has
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 predictions of reaching 80%
until
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by
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 2040
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, malaysia, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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