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We have become a disposable society, preferring to buy new products rather than repair existing items. Why do you think this is? How can this trend be reversed?

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At
this
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 time, we are leaving the modern era, and for that
reason
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, we are using one-time
items
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, not sustainable
products
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. People are focusing on new
products
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, not on repairing
items
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss
whole
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things
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, which is the question here. First of all, day by day, the technology is going to be upgraded, and for that
reason
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, we have facilitated it in every area. For our domestic requirements, we are bringing some
items
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 from the market that are easy to trade and durable.
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, a cupboard table, rack, and chair—all of those
items
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 are convenient for every place for placement. It has one other interesting point: using
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 is cost-effective for different levels of society.
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, right now we are
passing
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 a very tough time
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leaving and
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 very rushed for our commercial life. Time is limited for exchanging any
items
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 in our house.
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, they have changed
this
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 mindset because of the availability of the required
items
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. In the
last
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decate
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decade
, they were very cautious about every item and resource limitation. If they are facing any difficulties,
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 they want to try to repair them for future use Whoever it is,
this
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 trend has totally changed because the repair costs and the new
products
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 are the same price, which is why they are eager to take
this
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 new one. The
world-wide
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worldwide
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 transportation facilities are going to rapidly change, which is why they can take any
products
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 from anywhere at a low cost.
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 the main
reason
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 for using these new
items
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instead
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 of repairing them.
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, a Chinese engineer developed a new LCD (liquid crystal diode) with a low cost
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 very handy everywhere. And for that
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, people are buying new ones. In conclusion, it is happening
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 globalization and online shopping.
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 the economic development increased by the repeated purchases. It will be better for the next development.

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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and coherent structure. Make sure you have a clear introduction that presents the topic and your viewpoint, followed by body paragraphs that each focus on a single main idea with relevant support, and a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present but they need to be better developed. The conclusion should restate the topic and the writer's position, reflecting on the points made throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
The main points of the essay need better support through specific examples, explanations, or data. Make sure every point is directly related to the question and contributes to answering it.
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The response is complete but lacks depth. Expand on your ideas, explore the causes and effects, and offer more detailed solutions on how the trend can be reversed.
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The ideas presented need to be clearer and more comprehensive. Work on the logical flow and linkage between them to enhance the overall understanding of your points.
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Use more relevant and specific examples to substantiate your points, and make sure they are directly linked to the topic at hand.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Disposable society
  • Consumer culture
  • Status symbol
  • Globalization
  • Built-in obsolescence
  • Cost-effective
  • Repair skills
  • Environmental consequences
  • Resource depletion
  • Recycling
  • Right-to-repair legislation
  • Sustainability
  • Economic incentives
  • Circular economy
  • Refurbishing
  • Product lifespan
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