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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still time to take effective action. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The environment has
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had
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been
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 by
humanity
 for
millenia
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millennia
. The destruction of natural habitats and the extinction of species are several consequences of
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devestating
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devastating
 actions. Some people think there are ways to improve the situation,
while
 others believe that nothing can be done to restore
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wildlife and stop the inevitable collapse of the planet. In
this
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 both of these points and in the
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 present my opinion. It is
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widely
 known, that
humanity
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 played a
crutial
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crucial
critical
 role in changing the environment since the Ice Ages.
First,
it uncontrollably hunted animals in the wild, leading many of them to
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become
 endangered or extinct.
Then
, humans began to actively transform the terrain by building farms and
cilites
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facilities
cities
ciliates
, and that again had the same effect on the creatures that had populated these territories. It is obvious, that most of these actions cannot be undone and that
humanity
 will have to live with the dire consequences.
On the other hand
, governments all over the world are beginning to pay much more attention to environmental issues during the
last
 decade. Numerous laws have been approved that stimulate the industry to
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become
 more clean and nature-friendly. The expanded use of hybrid and electrical cars has reduced pollution levels in cities. Closing down of coal power plants and replacing them with solar panels improved the air in suburbs,
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allowing
 wildlife to
nurish
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nourish
.
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 sum up,
while
 certain effects cannot be undone, I believe there are always ways for
humanity
 to take action and at least partially restore the original conditions in which plants and animals thrived centuries ago.
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