The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given two pie charts illustrate the percentage of electronic devices that were used
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people between 18 and 25 years old in Canada for watching in two different 10-year
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, 2009 and 2019. The devices were divided into six types, which were mobile
phones
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, laptops, tablets, desktop computers, flat screens, and conventional TVs.
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, it can be clearly seen that conventional TVs were commonly used in 2009,
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in 2019 there was a shift of using devices to flat-screen TVs and mobile
phones
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. As the pie chart shows, in 2009, accounted for 34% of people were watching through conventional TV. In the second position were laptops constituted 20% followed by desktops in the third at 18%. Mobile
phones
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were only used by 18% of people. Meanwhile, flat-screen
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and
tablet
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stand at 8% and 5%, respectively. Regarding the proportion ten years later, mobile
phones
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and flat-screen have almost the same rate, which constituted 27% and 26% each. Tablets stand at the third most used making up 14% compared with 2009.
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, desktop computers and laptops experienced a decreased proportion and both accounted for 12%.
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, a significant drop occurred in conventional TV at only 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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