Some people prefer to rent accommodations while others buy their own home. Does renting a house or apartment have more advantages than buying one?

Buying
apartment
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an apartment
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are
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is
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more
advantages
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advantageous
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than renting a house, because we can have it permanently without some
disturbings
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disturbance
when we stay in it. People think buying
apartment
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an apartment
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will
spend much
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cost
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money,
therefore
there is no money
can
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that can
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not be saved. Factly renting an
apartement
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apartment
is
bad
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a bad
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idea
to
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for
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people who do not have a plan to own
a properties
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properties
a property
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. Owning an
apartement
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apartment
means having properties that in the future we can use
it
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apply
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for
our
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apply
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another interest
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other interests
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if we need
it
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them
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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