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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates
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dynamic
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the dynamic
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 of
birth
 and
death
 rates in Switzerland in
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the period
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 from 1970 to 2025. It is evident from the data that, there is a significant
rose
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 in
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the
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birth
rate
 for a given timeline with a length of 55 years, and it is predicted to
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continue
 increasing in 2025.
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 two decades witnessed a
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of
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death
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the death
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rate
,
while
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 of
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new borns
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 remained similar for
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 previous decade.
However
,
birth
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rate
 had
grew
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for
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 half a
million
 by 1995. In the same year was a peak
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a
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death
rate
, and it was 1,5
million
 citizens.
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a rapid
foll
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fall
 of a
death
rate
 for 400 thousand people, that number is smaller than was in 1995 and 1985, but still
for
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100 thousand more than in 1975. It is noticeable that
in
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2005 started a positive trend of
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birth
rate
 increasing, on
other
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 hand,
death
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the death
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rate
was decreasing
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. After slowly growing in
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 first three
decade
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decades
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,
birth
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the birth
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rate
 dramatically
increaed
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increased
 in 2005 for one
million
 citizens. The
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 continued in 2015 and
predicted
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 to increase in 2025 and is going to reach a point of 3,2
million
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a
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new borns
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, rate, million with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • incremental
  • statistical
  • longitudinal
  • population growth
  • life expectancy
  • fertility rate
  • mortality rate
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
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