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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Mobile phones, nowadays,
contains
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 essential features with entertainment
also
. There has been a large growth seen in usage hours of smartphones among youngsters. There are several reasons behind
this
 situation and I find
this
 development more beneficial than negative. Both the reasons and my view
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 elaborated
further
. The first reason for
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overusage
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over usage
overuse
 of smart devices by youngsters is the social benefit they provide. The
smart phone
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smartphone
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 connected
with
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internet
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the internet
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 opens up
the
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large possibilities, from creating new friends to communicating with them over social media.
For instance
, a child in my neighbourhood chats for hours with his school friends over Facebook (a social media) and
also
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 time over online video sharing phone application.
Moreover
,
the
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mobile gaming,
specially
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 multiplayer games, is another major reason for the situation. Children
plays
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 different
kind
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 of games over mobile for
the
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entertainment
purpose
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 and they involve themselves in games in
such
 a manner, that they forget about the timing and other work to do.
However
, I believe that smartphones have
also
 increased the knowledge of pupils. It has developed some important social skills,
such
 as communication
skill
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skills
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,
team work
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teamwork
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 and many more, by allowing them to work and play in groups, without the restriction of distance.
In addition
, children can learn through
internet
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the internet
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 by
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watching
watchin'
watchin
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watching
 online videos and reading articles, which ultimately helps them in their studies
as well as
 language skills.
For example
, whenever my niece
require
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 to know about something, he searches it over the internet and learns from it.
Moreover
, multiplayer online gaming improves their multitasking ability and it
also
 gives them a competitive environment
Overall
, I agree that
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over usage
overuse
 of smartphones on
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 basis is harmful
for
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 them, but if given proper guidance, mobile phones can help them in learning some life-long skills.
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coherence cohesion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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