Technological development leads to lots of environmental issues. Some people think a simple lifestyle can preserve the environment while others argue that technology itself can solve it. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

A simple lifestyle can preserve the
enviroment
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environment
, in my
opinion
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it is a fact because more complex
people
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people
as a
results
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many garbage will be spread in
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
. But the growing of
people
around the world is
reality
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which
can
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be denied,
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people
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needs grow higher day by day, as the result
to overcome
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the obstacle of
people
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people's
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need
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in recent times is technology. Technological developments can fulfill
people
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need
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even to help
daily
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life
acitivity
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activities
. Without technological development
people
can not live better than before, just imagine how we can live without
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,
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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,
car
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,
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or plane
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plane
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planes
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even for simple
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like
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a pencil
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or
pen
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we will can not write anything. How if we just communicate with
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whereas
we need to share fast information. We
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not know
many
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information as
quick
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as now if we do not have
internet
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the internet
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, we can know
many
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information from around the world just by clicking a button
in
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google
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. A simple lifestyle is important to preserve
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
, but without some technological
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developments
development
develompents
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people
can not live better than before. In
bottom
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line, environmental issues caused by technological
develompents
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developments
development
is
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are
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a
concequency
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consequence
of modern life, but
it
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they
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can be
overcomed
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overcome
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by using technology itself.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure to have a clear introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion. Each should have a clear purpose and should logically flow from one to the other.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points with more detailed explanations and specific examples. Rather than just stating your opinion, explain why you think that way and consider giving real-world examples to support your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on the variety and complexity of your sentence structures to improve logical flow and make your argument more persuasive.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address all parts of the question in your essay, providing a balanced discussion of both views as well as a clear personal stance on the issue.
task achievement
Use specific examples to back up your points, which will make your arguments more compelling and demonstrate a better understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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