In many country, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after birth of the newborn. Do you think that the advantages of the maternity leave outweigh its disadvantages?

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Maternity
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leave has become a mandatory regulation in many
country
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countries

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. During the first month after giving
birth
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, women or
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mother
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are recommended or allowed by their workplace to take
maternity
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leave.
On the contrary
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, when a company
didn't
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allow it, it could be considered as a violation towards
human's
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and women's rights.
Consequently
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, massive protests towards that company will likely
be
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occured
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occur

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.
Due to
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this
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, it can be seen that most people have agreed with
this
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rule and
i
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I

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believe the advantages of taking
maternity
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leave
does
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do

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outweigh its
disadvantage
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disadvantages

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. In
this
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essay,
i
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I

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will elaborate
some
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on some

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of its advantages.
Firstly
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,
maternity
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leave is
normalized
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and mandatory regulation in the workplace nowadays.
Moreover
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, most companies have declared
this
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exact rule
to
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in

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its
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their

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worker's
contract
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contracts

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. One of the
reason
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reasons

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behind
this
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because after giving
birth
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,
newly
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the new

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mom or
mother
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is
on
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their most fragile state. The process of giving
birth
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, as we all know, is not something easy. Giving
birth
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is a
life or death
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life-or-death

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situation because it
involved
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involves

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two
soul
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souls

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. Some
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mother
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mothers

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experienced blood
lost
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loss

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, oxygen drop, pass-out, and so on.
As a result
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, mothers can't do their usual routine and many doctors
advised
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advise

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to
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apply

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these new mothers to rest and focus on recovering.
Hence
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, why it is recommended for
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mother
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mothers

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to take
maternity
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leave.
Lastly
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, like their
mother
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,
new born
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newborn

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baby
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babies

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is
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are

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also
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fragile, especially
on
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in

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their first month. They still depend on their
mother
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for food and bond. New born
baby
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or we like to
called
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call

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a
new born
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newborn

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needs a lot of their
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parents
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parent's
parents'

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attention. From adapting to a new world
until
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to

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their feeding process.
For instance
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, it is important for a
baby
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to be fed with breast milk,
thus
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why an infant needs their
mom
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mom's

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presence most of the
times
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time

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. Both of their
parents
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, especially their mom, had to teach them on sucking or drinking from their
breast
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breasts

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.
Additionally
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,
this
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one month
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one-month

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process will affect
on
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apply

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their
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baby
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baby's

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growth and development. Based on psychology theory,
baby
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from the
age
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0
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of 0

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until 5
is
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are

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considered the most important
age
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or the golden
age
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for their development.
Thus
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,
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parents
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parents'
parent's

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involvement in
this
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particular
age
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is needed because they still need their guidance to survive. In conclusion,
i
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believe
its
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the

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advantages of taking
maternity
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leave
does
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apply

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outweigh its
disadvantage
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disadvantages

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. It can be proven by the condition of the new
mother
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and the importance of
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mother's
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the mother's

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presence for their
new born
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newborn

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. Psychology theory
said
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says

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that
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baby
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babies

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from the
age
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0
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of 0

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until 5
is
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are

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called the golden
age
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because it's their crucial
age
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for development and
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parents
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parents'
parent's

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involvement
are
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is

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also
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coherence cohesion
Continue to structure your essay with logical arguments and clear progression, but work on ensuring a more distinct introduction and conclusion. It is crucial to restate your thesis and summarize key points in the conclusion.
task achievement
While your essay completes the task, it can be improved by expanding on the specific advantages and also discussing potential disadvantages to provide a balanced view.
task achievement
To enhance clarity and the development of ideas, provide specific and varied examples that underscore your points. The use of theoretical references like psychology theory is good, but diversify with concrete cases and data if possible.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by linking your ideas more smoothly using a wider range of discourse markers and transition phrases.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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