45.The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

45.The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The presented table delineates the total number of individuals utilizing handphones in different activities in a developing country from 2006 to 2010. It is conspicuous that the most popular action was making calls, followed by sending and receiving text messages. Turning to communication purposes, there was the highest number of individuals using mobile
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for calling between 2006 and 2010.
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number remained stable at 100 users for the first two periods and one lower in 2010.
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, people who send and receive information increased fractionally, starting from 73 and ending
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a climax point at 79. As regards the non-communication activities, capturing pictures placed the third highest position compared to the others. It commenced at 66 and reached a peak in 2010 (76).
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, there was a dramatic increase in playing music by just above 100% for 4 years.
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games had a
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trend in
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observed period.
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