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the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it

the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it
The maps compare a school's plans in 1985 and today.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of pupils has increased, and several amenities
such
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 as
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool and fitness
center
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 added since the beginning of the period. Looking more closely at the given images,
firstly
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, the population of the school has risen from 1,500 individuals to 2,300 people. In terms of the novelties, a pool and a fitness
center
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centre
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 have been constructed. Interestingly, the office is the only place, which has protected its location throughout the period. The library that
were
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was
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 placed close to the office in 1985, has been transformed
a
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into a
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resource center, which contains a computer room.
Then
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, the size of the parking area has been reduced, and it has been surrounded by a road during the time frame. Turning to the classrooms, a storey has been added
the
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 block, which was built in 1985,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 two new blocks have
constructed
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been constructed
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 in the length
of
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apply
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time.

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