The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling differents types of vehicles such as cars, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.

The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling differents types of vehicles such as cars, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.
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The line graph shows the statistics of vehicles' use between 1970 and 2030. It demonstrates 3 means of transport: cars, trains and buses.
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of
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driving a private vehicle and trains increased significantly. In spite of
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fact, the number of those who travel by bus decreased slightly over the period. To start with, the figure of citizens who use a car was about 5
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people
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against 2
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riding on trains at the beginning of the period. Until 2010 the level of train passengers grew gradually.
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, there was a sharp rise in the next 2 decades. As to the car drivers, there was a steady upward trend with a sharp increase by 2030.
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, the figure of riders by bus was 3
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. Over the whole period, there was a slight downward trend to 2
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of
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people
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.
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, in 2015
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led to the fact that the number of train passengers exceeded those using buses for the first time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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