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Genetically engineered food is an important issue in modern society. Some people think that it will improve people's lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

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The lack of edible
foods
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 has become a major issue nowadays, especially in
the
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third-world
countries
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. Some endeavours have been made by researchers and scientists in order to solve
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 problem, including inventing a new way to produce food efficiently.
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 has led to the existence of food produced chemically, going through engineering processes which at some point influence its degree of healthiness. One party agrees that
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 phenomenon has to be ended. All of those arguments are based on the effect that might made from
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 continuous activity.
Foods
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manipulated
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 genetically are believed to be hazardous to health, especially when consumed for
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the long-term
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long-term
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long term
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.
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, Individuals consuming
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at
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long-run
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 might experience diseases,
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 as cholesterol, hypertension, and so forth.
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,
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 innovation made by the scientist might be the solution
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 decreasing the rate of deaths caused by lack of accessibility to
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decent
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. Engineered
foods
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 are proven to be safe to be stored for years.
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, many
countries
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, especially
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developing ones,
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 made
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 of
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 fact as an answer
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issue
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 happening in their
countries
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.
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, some
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 in Africa have acknowledged that the existence of instant noodles plays a pivotal role in assisting
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people to get edible
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. In conclusion, it is undoubted that
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 different kind of food gives some drawbacks to people.
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, I believe that
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 kind of phenomenon must be encouraged. More and more unprivileged groups will
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, leading to a more decent life.
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structure
Ensure that you have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should clearly state the topic and outline the main points to be discussed. Your body paragraphs should each focus on one main point, with clear topic sentences at the beginning. The conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your opinion without introducing new information.
cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay. Use a variety of cohesive devices such as linking words, pronouns, and synonyms appropriately to ensure that the essay progresses logically from one idea to the next.
support
Provide clear and detailed examples to support your points. This helps to demonstrate the validity of your arguments and adds depth to your essay. Each main point in your body paragraphs should be supported by specific evidence or examples.
task response
Make sure to fully address the task. This means discussing both views presented in the prompt and providing your own opinion. It's important to spend approximately the same amount of time on each viewpoint and on your own opinion to ensure a balanced response.
development
Work on developing clear and comprehensive ideas within each paragraph. It's important to explore each main point thoroughly and ensure that your ideas are well explained and easy to follow.
examples
Ensure the examples you provide are relevant and directly support the main point of the paragraph. Each example should clearly connect to the argument it's meant to support.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetically engineered food
  • Nutritional content
  • Crop yields
  • Food scarcity
  • Developing countries
  • Resistant to pests and diseases
  • Chemical pesticides
  • Environmental impact
  • Health risks
  • Allergic reactions
  • Long-term health effects
  • Reduction in biodiversity
  • Crossbreed with wild plants
  • Ethical issues
  • Agribusinesses
  • Food supply
  • Livelihoods of small farmers
  • Stringent regulation
  • Extensive testing
  • Transparent labeling
  • Informed choices
  • Governmental and international bodies
  • Safety and fairness
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