Some companies spend a lot of money on scientific research and use animals for testing. Many argue that this is for a just cause while others say otherwise. Do the advantages of using animals in research outweigh its disadvantages?
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on
animal testing in order to seek novel Change preposition
in
drugs
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the Change preposition
in
mean time
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meantime
However
, numerous opinions raised concerns on whether it Linking Words
trigger
the inhumane behaviour towards tested Change the verb form
triggers
animals
behind scientific Use synonyms
researches
since Fix the agreement mistake
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animals
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often Verb problem
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suffered
from the side effects Wrong verb form
suffer
cased
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caused
drugs
and treatments during examinations or Use synonyms
died
of the fatal dosage in toxicology Wrong verb form
die
tests
. As I see it, animal Use synonyms
tests
bring more advantages Use synonyms
that
disadvantages.
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than
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, animal Linking Words
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test
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the only in vivo method which able to detect pernicious effects that might engendered in Correct subject-verb agreement
are
human
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the human
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test
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tests
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competent for conducting Correct subject-verb agreement
are
large scale
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large-scale
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to probe out both the target proclivities and potential adverse outcomes through varieties of biodiversity. Correct word choice
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, short lifecycles of animal species allow Linking Words
scientist
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scientists
long term
effect across the generations of certain Add a hyphen
long-term
animals
.
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Secondly
, animal Linking Words
test
is an effective method to explore feasible novel Use synonyms
drugs
and therapies for current illnesses. Use synonyms
For instance
, humans and all mammals have identical essential internal organs. Linking Words
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, both human and mammalian species Linking Words
are
fall victim to the same general maladies, Unnecessary verb
apply
such
as cardiac diseases and various cancers. For these reasons, scientists can confidently apply the results of a panoply of medical experiments on Linking Words
animals
to human beings and be more confident when it's time to perform relevant Use synonyms
experiment
on humans directly in clinical trials.
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animals
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animal tests
test
may Use synonyms
results
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result
animals
suffering from unnecessary inhuman treatment, engendering a waste of scientific resources. Since animal Use synonyms
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tests
results Fix the agreement mistake
test
unable
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are unable
duplicated
in human beings during clinical trials, experimented Add a missing verb
be duplicated
animals
are forced to endure Use synonyms
the
casualties ranging from amputation, inflammation or pain which Correct article usage
apply
have
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has
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contribution Add an article
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on
delving into the new evidence. Change preposition
to
As a consequence
, animal Linking Words
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In conclusion, I still believe that animal Use synonyms
tests
bring more advantages Use synonyms
that
disadvantages. Correct word choice
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Animals
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Animal
tests
provide methods which ultimately eliminate the sacrifice of human lives in clinical trials for testing Use synonyms
drugs
for new treatments.Use synonyms
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