Some companies spend a lot of money on scientific research and use animals for testing. Many argue that this is for a just cause while others say otherwise. Do the advantages of using animals in research outweigh its disadvantages?
Large scale
of
investments are made by the drug industrials Change preposition
apply
on
animal testing in order to seek novel Change preposition
in
drugs
and treatments as well as
ensure product safety at
the Change preposition
in
mean time
. Correct your spelling
meantime
However
, numerous opinions raised concerns on whether it trigger
the inhumane behaviour towards tested Change the verb form
triggers
animals
behind scientific researches
since Fix the agreement mistake
research
animals
are
often Verb problem
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suffered
from the side effects Wrong verb form
suffer
cased
by testing Correct your spelling
caused
drugs
and treatments during examinations or died
of the fatal dosage in toxicology Wrong verb form
die
tests
. As I see it, animal tests
bring more advantages that
disadvantages.
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than
Firstly
, animal test
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tests
is
the only in vivo method which able to detect pernicious effects that might engendered in Correct subject-verb agreement
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human
body in a short period. Animal Add an article
the human
test
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tests
is
competent for conducting Correct subject-verb agreement
are
large scale
experiments Add a hyphen
large-scale
as
to probe out both the target proclivities and potential adverse outcomes through varieties of biodiversity. Correct word choice
apply
Moreover
, short lifecycles of animal species allow scientist
to perform repetitive experiments in order to evaluate the Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
long term
effect across the generations of certain Add a hyphen
long-term
animals
.
Secondly
, animal test
is an effective method to explore feasible novel drugs
and therapies for current illnesses. For instance
, humans and all mammals have identical essential internal organs. Therefore
, both human and mammalian species are
fall victim to the same general maladies, Unnecessary verb
apply
such
as cardiac diseases and various cancers. For these reasons, scientists can confidently apply the results of a panoply of medical experiments on animals
to human beings and be more confident when it's time to perform relevant experiment
on humans directly in clinical trials.
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experiments
On the other hand
, animals
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animal tests
test
may results
in Wrong verb form
result
animals
suffering from unnecessary inhuman treatment, engendering a waste of scientific resources. Since animal tests
results Fix the agreement mistake
test
unable
to Add a missing verb
are unable
duplicated
in human beings during clinical trials, experimented Add a missing verb
be duplicated
animals
are forced to endure the
casualties ranging from amputation, inflammation or pain which Correct article usage
apply
have
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has
fertile
contribution Add an article
a fertile
on
delving into the new evidence. Change preposition
to
As a consequence
, animal tests
are considered more disadvantageous.
In conclusion, I still believe that animal tests
bring more advantages that
disadvantages. Correct word choice
than
Animals
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Animal
tests
provide methods which ultimately eliminate the sacrifice of human lives in clinical trials for testing drugs
for new treatments.Submitted by elly201559 on
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