Environmental problems such as pollution and climatic variations are increasing nowadays. The governments have taken some measures at a global level. But they got only few solutions. Why is it so? How can this problem be solved?

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Saving the
environment
has become the top priority across the world.
However
, the measures taken have not been enough to address the issue.
This
essay intends to look into why the measures have always fallen short of the mark
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and suggest some
solutions
to mitigate the problem. Many reasons can be attributed
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the failure of governments in finding
solutions
. The first and foremost reason is the difficulty in balancing
the
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economic development and environmental protection. It is irrefutable that steps taken for the protection of the
environment
have some sort of adverse effect on the economy, albeit little.
For instance
,
although
solar power is renewable and non-polluting it is still considerably costlier than thermal power.
This
is a major reason why the world hasn’t already shifted towards solar power completely.
Secondly
, there is the problem of consensus when it comes to global
issues
. For some
countries
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environmental
issues
are not so high on the priority list and for others it is critical.
For example
the island nations of
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Pacific
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have been the biggest champions of environmental treaties because their very survival is at stake with global warming and
consequently
sea level rise.
On the other hand
, there are some
countries
like the Arctic
countries
, which might
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from global warming as it may lead to an increase in the growing season.
Solutions
to environmental
issues
are not straightforward first because of the very magnitude of the problem and
also
for the reasons cited above. It requires a change in outlook towards environmental
issues
. Just as pollution is not bound by political boundaries, in the same
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our
solutions
cannot be in silos. The world truly needs to come together as one to tackle
this
issue.
Countries
have to make compromises,
for
instance
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rich
countries
have to help developing
countries
with technology and financial aid. Developing
countries
also
must balance their growth, keeping the
environment
in mind.
To sum up
, it can be seen clearly, why the steps taken so far have failed to save the
environment
.
However
, the time has come to do some soul-searching and take proactive steps for the
environment
.
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