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It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think the disadvantages of such a development outweigh the advantages?

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It is irrefutable that more and more
people
 are running after materialistic
things
 like cars,
television
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televisions
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 and refrigerators.
While
 there are a few benefits of
this
 materialism, I believe the drawbacks are much more. Admittedly, there are certain advantages of the increasing
demand
of
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 consumer goods. The main advantage is that the increasing
demand
 means increasing production and employment.
Thus
, the increasing
demand
 directly boosts the economy. Another advantage is that the quality of life of
people
 is getting better. The luxuries of yesterday like cars, refrigerators and air conditioners have become the necessities of today. There is no doubt that
people
 are living a more comfortable life than ever before.
However
,
this
 trend has several drawbacks.
Firstly
, the rising
demand
 and use of
such
 products
is
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 leading to environmental degradation. In fact, today a major source of air pollution in the cities is the exhaust fumes from cars.
Similarly
, more consumer goods means more use of natural resources and more waste. Waste is
also
 increasing as companies are using
lower quality
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 materials like plastic to maintain profit margins.
Secondly
, materialism
also
 has a negative effect on relationships as it forces
people
 to work harder and spend less time with loved ones. In the long run, the love for materialistic
things
 can never compete with
satisfaction
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people
 achieve from relationships.
Thus
, most
people
 despite being richer and having more luxuries are less
happier
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happy
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 than before.
Finally
, materialism is leading to crime as more and more
people
 are resorting to unethical means like stealing to get
such
things
.
People
 today value owning
such
things
 much more
over
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than
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 integrity and honesty.
Thus
, society’s value systems are being corrupted by
this
 trend.
To sum up
, there is no doubt that the increasing
demand
 for materialistic
things
 has some advantages, but the drawbacks certainly outweigh them.
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