The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two site maps demonstrate the Norbiton town's current industry
area
and
it's
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its
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future development. The industrial
area
is located at the east of the town, between the
river
and a
highway
. In
this
area
, there is a roundabout with two exits,
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one connecting to the
highway
and the other leading to the central
area
of the industrial park. In total 7 factories are built along the street, where 3 of them are located next to the roundabout.
In addition
, the
river
is located in the north of the industrial
area
, and it is
parraelle
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parallel
to the
highway
. There is
a
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farmland across
to
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the
river
. As per the future
developement
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development
plan,
this
area
will be redesigned
to
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into
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a living community with a lot of housing
area
,
accompanying
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with
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neccessary
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necessary
facilities
such
as
school
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a school
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, playground, medical centre and shops. Particularly,
school
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will be located
at the end
of the street.
Moreover
, more
infrustructure
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infrastructure
will be built,
such
as a bridge for people to cross the
river
and a roundabout on the
highway
for entering
to
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the
area
.
Overall
, the
area
is being planned as a living
area
rather than an industrial place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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