Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching t.v. why do they do this? do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the issue of some
people
tend
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to
imitates
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public
figure
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figures
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is blowing up.
The society
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believe
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it is the way
of
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those
people
to express their gratitude towards them.
However
, is it really substantially contributing positive impact
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the ones that
being
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copied? I personally argue that the negative impact
outweigh
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the positive
due to
loads of disadvantages they would possibly get. First of all, it is a widely known fact that being a public
figure
means they are famously known by everyone
in
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on
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the continent. It brings
to
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us to
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the fact that whatever they do or whatever they say will always be watched by your
admirer
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. Without
doubt
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a doubt
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, as celebrities
give
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massive
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impact
to
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the community,
people
will start to follow them as they
got
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motivated by their move. They would constantly begin to impersonate the public
figure
's
life style
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lifestyle
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, fashion, or even their habit by browsing through the internet or
read
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reading
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magazines. Somehow, it will be beneficial to their career development since you they plenty of followers and job opportunities. Most importantly, it will
also
contribute to their income, interpersonal skills, and personal growth.
On the other hand
, the risk of being a public
figure
or a celebrity can
be happen
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at
anytime
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any time
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and anywhere.
For instance
, famous
people
will face difficulties when they go to a public space, as they get chased by their fans who
notices
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notice
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them
immidiately
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immediately
. In some worst cases, fans will follow them to their private
place
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such
as
house
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a house
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or villa to get more information.
In addition
, the obstacles increased as the number of
people
who
imitates
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their
life style
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lifestyle
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rose rapidly. The more
people
who tend to look like them, the bigger the chance of them to lose their true identity. Self-branding of fake
people
who
pretends
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pretend
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to be them
while
doing criminal actions would bring scandal and affect their career.
To sum up
, the drawbacks of being copied by
people
just because they are celebrities,
outweight
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outweigh
the advantages. I firmly believe
this
will create less beneficial
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issues
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for them
as well as
they are losing privacy of their own life.
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