The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.

The table chart depicts details for entertainment information of favourite activities in eight countries. It is clear from the chart that the Japanese community just likes to read and they do not care about the other activity. The USA nation illustrates the most multiple activities and the TVs achieved the highest number of users 60

while

the lowest in the USA was sleeping with 2.

However

, the Canadians were the second

multiple

Correct word choice

most

show examples

activities as same as the USA the TVs were the most popular activity.

In addition

, the sleep remained the same 2 people like to sleep, and the beach in Canada

has no

Verb problem

is not

show examples

popularity

Replace the word

popular

show examples

Moreover

, the TVs, beaches

as well

Correct word choice

and

show examples

sports show no care in three countries France, England and Japan. Reading was the top activity in France and England was 30, and Japan was 62.

To sum up

, we could say that the TV is the most popular

while

the least is music

as well as

sleep.

Submitted by Yousef on Fri Jan 26 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

▼

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, while".

▼

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

160 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
You live in a block of flats; your neighbour makes a lot of noise which has caused problems for you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: •explain the situation •tell him/her how you are effected by this •Suggest what you want the landlord to do.
I am Joseph, tenant of your apartment no: 301 in palava. I am writing this letter to explain the problem, which I am encountering from the neighbour since last 15 days. He makes a lot of noise throughout the day and night, which adversely effecting my office job during the work from home and mental condition. Even after my request, he is continuing the same activity. So here I am really looking for your intervention to resolve this matter quickly. Otherwise, I may need to think about any other convenient option of stay nearby.
5
band
many people like to go on holiday abroad, while other believes it is better to visit places within their own country. discuss both of view and give your opinion.
Although, some people tend to visit another country for holiday to experiencing something new, others feel that it is better to spent holiday on local places in terms to economic reasons. Personally, I agree with the idea to go on holiday abroad.
5.5
band
Many places in the world rely on tourism as a primary source of income.Unfortunately,tourism can also be a surce of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disavantages of tourism in the modern world.Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?
Booming touristry leads to the increased economic growth of a country,often turning out as the main source of income for it.Mismanaged touristry creates more issues compared to the benefits brought by it.
6.5
band
An increasing number of people change their career and place of residence several times during their life time. Is this positive or negative development?
These days, more and more people tend to change their jobs and living places many times during their lifetimes. Personally, I think the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages for society in some cases, as it provides people with opportunities for personal and professional development.
6.5
band
Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?
Living in the rural area is thought as the best option for children by a group of people, while others believe that cities offer more opportunities. In my opinion, if the city offers security and green areas, I agree it is a better place to raise the next generation enjoying some advantages from both sides.

The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.

You live in a block of flats; your neighbour makes a lot of noise which has caused problems for you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: •explain the situation •tell him/her how you are effected by this •Suggest what you want the landlord to do.

many people like to go on holiday abroad, while other believes it is better to visit places within their own country. discuss both of view and give your opinion.

Many places in the world rely on tourism as a primary source of income.Unfortunately,tourism can also be a surce of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disavantages of tourism in the modern world.Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

An increasing number of people change their career and place of residence several times during their life time. Is this positive or negative development?

Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?