the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it

the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it
These maps
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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demonstrate different layouts of a school in 1958 and in recent days.
Overall
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, there are several changes happened to the school , but in a significant way , the car park is
fanished
Correct your spelling
finished
,
while
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now there are a lot of new buildings like a pool and fitness
centre
Use synonyms
are
Wrong verb form
being
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built, and the library existed in the past but now it is changed to be a computer room and resource
centre
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. In 1985 ,
while
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the population was only 1,500 there biggest part of the school was a field and just two blocks
in
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to
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the right the classrooms ,
while
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in
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on
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the left a library , office and a small car park
in addition
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to the main parking after crossing the road. Nowadays , the
classroom
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number of classroom
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blocks number are increased to 3 and only the main parking
are
Correct your spelling
area
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remains, with
building
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the building
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of both a pool and fitness
centre
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
on
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the left side of the field , with a big replacement of the library to become a resource
centre
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and computer room.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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