The pie chart below represents the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The bar chart shows how these causes affected three regions of the world in the 1990s. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart below represents the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The bar chart shows how these causes affected three regions of the world in the 1990s.

Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The pie graph illustrates the major causes of
the
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land
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degradation
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from all around the world, and the table depicts how much
land
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degradaded
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degraded
in North America,
Europe
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and
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Oceania
due to
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the main factors.
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, over-grazing is the most significant reason
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worldwide
land
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degradation
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. The proportions of total
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lost
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degradation
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in
Europe
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and Oceania are noticeable,
however
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, their
losts
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loss
primarily depends on different factors. There are three main
land
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degradation
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reasons, and the primary factor is over-grazing.
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of grasses by animals accounts for just above a third of the total
land
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degradation
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. Depletion of forests is the second-highest with 30%, and
this
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activities which are nearly 30% of the total lost. The remaining volume of
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land
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degradation
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is depending
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on other causes with %7. Almost a quarter of the total
land
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degradation
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is
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occured
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occurs
in
Europe
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, which is followed by
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Oceania
and North America, with 13% and 5% respectively.
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the obvious cause in
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Oceania
is over-grazing with 11.3% of the total
degradation
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, deforestation (9.8%) and over-cultivation (7.7%) are the major causes in
Europe
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, europe with synonyms.
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