In some areas of the UD, a 'curfew' is imposed, In which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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crimes are committed by them impairing a brilliant generation. To face it, in some areas of the UD, curfews are implemented.
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some positions and a personal opinion will be provided.
Firstly
, a
curfew
is the act of
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youngsters
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out of doors after a specific time, usually at night.
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established a
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of assassinations perpetrated by 14-15 year olds involved in gangs and drug dealing.
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an environment of safety
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childhood and adulthood.
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infants
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in criminal activities and
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leisure time with parents, relatives or close friends.
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enhance their passionate skills.
However
, a
curfew
can be mocked when a teen is accompanied by a grown-up.
On the other hand
, progressives claim curfews are just an analogy
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being in prison. The impact of these instances could affect negatively the freedom and personal growth of youth. It would become another issue since emotions
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as depression, anxiety and stress are as harmful as criminal life.
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of COVID-19 was a global
curfew
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strongly affected
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suicide cases and, indeed,
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of restrictions.
Hence
, these prohibitions undermine the instinct act to socialize responsibly with others and interrupt the ability to make assertive decisions.
To conclude
, both positions have pros and cons but, in my opinion, I completely disagree with curfews. In spite of being an affordable solution, is useless and does not address the root of the problem. I think lovely parental education and trust from society towards young members could diminish evil acting.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • curfew
  • teenagers
  • out of doors
  • accompanied
  • crime prevention
  • personal freedom
  • independence
  • parental authority
  • monitoring
  • autonomy
  • effectiveness
  • enforcement
  • confrontations
  • law enforcement
  • alternative measures
  • civic engagement
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