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The plans below show a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university (Đề thi ngày 25/07/2020) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The plans above illustrate the architectural layouts inside a
one person
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 dormitory
room
 and accommodation for 2 individuals.
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while
 the
room
 for 2 people has more space, the opposite was seen in the
one
 for an individual. The single
room
 is 6 meters long and 2.5 meters wide
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 and costs 200$ per week. A
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 kitchen including a sink, a stove and a microwave is opposite the bathroom. A single bed is located next to the window to get more sunlight.
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, there is a study desk next to the bed where the student can do his or her homework.
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, there is a TV opposite the desk which students can entertain after a long stressful day. Costing $350 per week, the double
room
 has the same length but 1.5 meters wider compared to the other. The kitchen is turned perpendicularly, making space
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 a table and 2 chairs where students can socialize and watch TV. There are 2 beds in the
room
,
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 remains
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 same position compared to a single
room
 and the second bed is perpendicular
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 the first
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 and separated by 2 cupboards to ensure privacy. Both study desks are arranged parallel along both sides of the walls. Next to the desk , there is a bookshelf against the bathroom wall.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure you provide a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your essay effectively. While you've provided some level of introduction, a distinct conclusion summarizing the main features and comparisons is missing, which is essential for a well-rounded response.
logical structure
Improve the logical structure of your essay by organizing information more systematically. It could be beneficial to compare corresponding features of each room type as you describe them, rather than describing them separately.
supported main points
Enhance your main points with more explicit comparisons. The essay would benefit from clearer and more direct contrasts between the two room types, particularly in how their features affect the students' living experiences.
complete response
Make sure your response is complete by fully addressing all aspects of the task. This includes describing all significant features shown in the plans and explicitly making relevant comparisons where necessary.
clear comprehensive ideas
Your ideas are clear, but strive to express them more comprehensively. By delving deeper into the implications of each design feature, you can provide a richer analysis of the plans.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate more relevant and specific examples to support your descriptions. Doing so would make the comparison between the two rooms more vivid and detailed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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