Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think is a positive or negative develompent?

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children

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hours

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just to use their smartphones.

This

can lead to bad impacts in which they can not grow well. Based on my opinion, There are 2 reasons regarding

this

matter.

First,

the lack of parental monitoring, and

second,

the

development

of

technologies

have been improved nowadays. Parental supervision

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a significant role in

this

case. They should be monitoring the gadget usage of their

children

so they don't get addicted,

cause

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when the addiction comes, the

children

might get a big problem in

the

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terms of their

development

,

such

as they can't socialize effectively with their

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. The parents can do several things to provide

this

.

For instance

, they can

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the screen time of their

children

's

phone

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for only a small number of hours

everyday

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, it might be very useful for

children

to get rid of the addiction.

Moreover

, parents can take

out

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their

children

to do some outdoor activities, it can be any kind of sports or just

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around the park. Other than that, the

technologies

have their own role as well in

this

matter. The improvement of

technologies

can lead to both sides, negative and positive. Yet in

this

problem

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there are more negative impacts

for

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the

children

's

development

. If we look back

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to

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several years later,

children

are more active and they tend to play outside with their

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mate

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and

had

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a lot

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of interactions

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interactions

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,

this

because

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the

technologies

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has

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not

published

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massively and improved significantly. To summarize, the excessive use of smartphones

have

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a

real

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bad impact

to

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children

's

development

,

that

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they can't

not

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socialize well with their friends. It can caused by the lack of their

parents

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role and the huge progress of the

technologies

.