the diagram belows shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years

the diagram  belows shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years
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image illustrates a ground floor plan of what seems to
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a library dating back
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2001 in comparison to a similar ground floor plan 8 years ahead. Major changes are made throughout the floor plan
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the year 2009.
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structure
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of arranged boxes that
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then
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changed to long rectangle boxes. The
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and history shelf were expanded into a variety of
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interests, and the fiction side was changed to children's books.
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, the newspapers and periodicals section were transformed into films and DVDs adjusting to technological change.
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change
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the 2 computers added to the library. Inversely, changes to the entrance and librarian's desk were not to be made, and the stairs
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extended.
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